Copy for Paragraph Analysis 2

In this blog post I will link a paragraph analysis of project 2. I will also write a reflection on what I learned about the strengths and weaknesses of my documents paragraphs.

Screenshot from my computer, 10/17/15

From carrying out a pargraph analysis for my project 2 draft, I learned a couple important things. Something that I already knew, but was reinforced by the paragraph analysis was my lack of smooth transitions. Within my paragraphs, I lack smooth transitions, and more importantly, my paper does not effectively flow from one paragraph to the next. Another thing I learned was that I need more evidence within each body paragraph. I focus well on the main point, but the main point would be better developed in each paragraph if I include more direct quotes from the original TEDx talk.